APEnglish–Los Al

Period 5

The Day in English

Today we discussed the use of archaic language used in text in regards to the AP Exam. We also read and analyzed two examples of essay responses to the Hazlitt passage we wrote about Tuesday. The key problems presented by the piece were over the meaning of the word want, which in this case did not mean desire, but rather a lack of. After going over this, we analyzed and graded the example essays, basing the grading on not what the writer did wrong, but rather what they did correctly. I believed the first essay to be a seven paper, when it was actually an eight, and the second was as I scored it and actually, a six. The first essay seemed more well constructed than the second and more analytical. The second showed some analysis of the passage, but was more clever than anything.

Remember, read the language used in the prompt not just carefully, but accurately. Also, your scores are based on what you do correctly, not on what you have done wrong.

Farewell and don’t forget,
“A hungry Jack can’t find nookie.” – Mr. Eldridge

William Avalos

Period 4

hello everybody

the academic part of our day:

today we went over the essay that we wrote in class yesterday. the average score for the essay when it was given by college board was a 3.95 (I think). so if you didn’t get a 5 or above don’t worry, your not alone, most of high school juniors that took the AP test that year didn’t either.

the thing that probably confused people the most was the word “want” in the title. want here does not mean desire to have but lack of. therefore Hazlitt was not talking about wanting money. he was really talking about how money is necessary to live a full life, where you do not worry about what you are going to eat the next day or if you will have a job the next week.

we then read 2 essays. one was very well written and the writer seemed to have a full understanding of the document so it received an 8. the second one answered the question and sufficiently analyzed the passage so it received a 6.

when we were done Mr. E passed out the essays we had written and we read and graded eachothers in a read-a-round. we then talked to the members of our group so that we could agree on one score to give the essays.

since we still had some time left in class there was a Q&A where Mr. E answered what we should do if we realize the point of our essay when we are half way through writing a totally different response ( to prevent this make sure that you do not start writing until you are sure that you have a full understanding of the passage). I heard Mr. E say that rhetoric is persuasion to Nadir but im not really sure why.

and that’s all for the academic part of today

for the totally random and unrelated
*despite being reminded by Tricia that i was scribe i still forgot until the period was almost over
* Sean and Annie continued their battle over who the space under annie’s desk belongs to.
*a teacher quietly came in and sat down on the couch and i didnt notice until she was pointed out to me
* Hair is now being used as a fertilizer. but not blonde hair because its too white?
* Mr. E ordered a carne asada burrito and jordan wanted one too
*my group discussed the prices of pollo loco
*when the AP packets were passed out they were warm and alot of people felt the urge to put the paper to their faces to feel the heat.

i guess if this

and

gives us this

im ok with it

til the next time

andrea
 

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